Storytelling Practice - "Trusted Nails 01"

I wanted to train myself to create better compositions, and bring in storytelling (I feel I lack on that department).

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THE STORY
A group of travellers took a false turn, and their new road ended in a thicket. Next to a pond, there lied a cottage that seemed to belong to a poor family. Outside there were seven children, minding their lives and playing. One of them approached to sing;

"Men arrived to the pond, found there a girl
A dwarf burst a vein and yell, "I can feel mother's pain"
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Monster took our mother, the mom cried "younguns leave me for other"
... Soon it laughed, "how to drink yous, how to get fat 'n fed"
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No more mother, or the uncle kind of other
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We burned our cats, sucked the bones clean of fats
(one more child appears behind to finish):
"ONE TWO THREE - get the tad out of--- 'EREEE"
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Core idea was to have dark scene with suffering children.